Tuesday, April 3, 2012

writing sample

Free time
Free time is one of the best parts of camp, I think

In cricket I can remember Mr McCallum hitting heaps of balls over the dorms and I mean heaps. In tennis all I can hear is ehh, ehh, ehh because we had to grunt and then I hear Noah go ehhhhhhhhh. It was like there was lots of mini Maria Sherapovas’ on the court.

Free time is so good even the adults play, but we always smash them so it doesn’t matter.


S.A
What did I do well? I think I had a good structure.
What would I do differently next time? I would make it a bit more exiting.
What have I learnt? To start off with an exciting beginning

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